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revision loop

In the planning and writing stages, you try to get as many of your ideas as possible on paper; in the revision stage, you carefully re-read and re-think what you have written and make changes. These changes are sometimes called "local" (emphasizing specific parts) and "global" (tackling more wholistic issues). Of course writing and revising feed into each other as you think of new ideas to include or make decisions about what to cut or reorganize, always using your thesis statement as the guiding force. But for many teachers and dedicated writers revision is defined as the “real” writing, just as re-reading is often thought of as the “real” reading.



The following Web sites offer several helpful representations that should help you learn more when . . .

Jump to a brief slideshow about some of the levels of revision you'll encounter.

Some of what Craig Kleinman likes to see in a revision . . .
Listen to what one CCSF instructor has to say about revision.

Consider the feedback from teachers, tutors, and classmates on your draft as critical to the revision process. Since writing, as you may remember, is really a social act, then revision is practically a party. Focus on the comments, not the grade. And if it means starting over, believe it or not, that can be very exciting.

How about a handout to help you revise? Here's one!

Several CCSF-endorsed computer programs and Web sites could bring more depth to the work you do during revision by offering you different ways to see and hear the development of your thesis-support essay.

Hey, if you used Inspiration to map or outline your draft, why not use it again to visualize the shape and content of your revision?

One of the most popular programs in Cyberia is Write Outloud, a text-to-speech program that allows writers to hear what they have written. This is an excellent program for revision work, as it can increase critical distance and allow for more audience considerations. Copy and paste your writing into Write OutLoud to see and hear more revision possibilities. It's fun too!

Are you a student?  Would you like to say something about revision?

You're on the Revising page in The Cyberia Activity Guide's Planning and Writing Layers of Learning. To go to a different layer, click on one of the links below. As the layers are developed, links will become active.
  • Prewriting & Brainstorming
  • Forming a Thesis
  • Planning & Outlining
  • Drafting
  • Introducing & Concluding
  • Forming Topic Sentences
  • Strengthening Paragraphs
  • Giving & Getting Feedback
  • Revising
  • Proofreading
  • Learning from Sample Essays

Last updated: -- #BeginDate f>>> August 14, 2006
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